Ode to Winter

To understand the point of this post, first look here.  The idea is to create a rhythmic poem from twenty-one words, including the words ‘in winter we shiver.’

Icicles shattering, water buckets clattering,
Drifting powdery snow;
In winter we shiver and skate on the river,
When it’s twenty below.

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12 Responses to Ode to Winter

  1. I just love this! I can see it in my mind. Brrrr.

  2. Alison Green says:

    What a fab piece. Love drifting powdery snow. Well done.

  3. Lisa Wields Words says:

    Great job. Clear meaning, great rhythm, and shivery cold. 😉

  4. Sally-Jayne says:

    Love “icicles shattering”. The rhythm of this one is spot on – well done.

  5. This is super. Brrrr need to get an extra jumper!

  6. bubbleboo says:

    Oh, this is just wonderful!

  7. Ooh, shades of: When icicles hang by the wall…. My other thought was – why do we do that when it’s twenty degrees below?

  8. jfb57 says:

    Lovely Phil. Love the link with the ice & temperature.

    Can I be suggestive – if you put ‘it is’ at the end it flows precisely. (I did say being picky!)

  9. Mrs TeePot says:

    Oh it’s wonderful! You really are amazing with words, you seem to be able to make them do whatever you want, I can never make them behave! lol!

  10. Robin Hawke says:

    Wonderful images, lovely, Robin

  11. Lynda Dixon says:

    Very good! Great words to capture the coldness of winter.

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